The Lonliest Dog in Outer Space 1

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[–]JasonCarswellMental Orgy 2 insightful - 2 fun2 insightful - 1 fun3 insightful - 2 fun -  (1 child)

Firstly you should know is Regis.

IFIFY:
Firstly you should know my name is Regis.

Plus there is awkward grammar and/or missing punctuation.

The story is boring. The vocabulary is boring. The character is boring. You even posted it in /s/whatever instead of /s/Writing - boring.

Get a good story. Then we can talk about the illustrations.

[–][deleted] 2 insightful - 2 fun2 insightful - 1 fun3 insightful - 2 fun -  (0 children)

I appreciate the critique.