The Lonliest Dog in Outer Space 1

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I am the lonliest dog in outer space. More on that later. Firstly you should know my name is Regis. My owner named me after a game show host or something. It's pretty humiliating. He's not perfect. He drinks too much and he has a temper. I love him unreasonably so anyways, and I always will.

This all started in the long long ago as I was sitting in my bed, bored, hungry, and neglected. The air suddenly felt thick and sparkled. One moment I was home and the next I was in a cold metal room that didn't smell right. I didn't know it then but I had just been stolen. Even worse, there were absolutely no treats.

Being a somewhat sophisticated modern dog I did only reasonable thing I could, I shat in the corner and layed down and cried.

https://i.imgur.com/EKJ5jZx.jpg

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[–][deleted] 3 insightful - 2 fun3 insightful - 1 fun4 insightful - 2 fun -  (0 children)

Don't worry readers, Regis gets reunited with his abusive owner eventually and gets the bitch in the end.

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u/Jasoncarswell what do you think? I know you weren't really hyped on the idea but I think it has promise.

[–]JasonCarswellMental Orgy 2 insightful - 3 fun2 insightful - 2 fun3 insightful - 3 fun -  (3 children)

Check for typos. Looks like a good album cover from a great album.

I'm subversive but not a child so I don't think I'm your target audience. As an animator and adult I used to enjoy all things animation. That was well over 20 years ago. I've moved into several other life-phases. This is not my cup of tea.

[–][deleted] 2 insightful - 2 fun2 insightful - 1 fun3 insightful - 2 fun -  (2 children)

Check for typos

I used google lens to transcribe it from my sketch book, I thought I had got them all.

I'm subversive but not a child so I don't think I'm your target audience

So what you're really saying is it's the best thing you've ever read and you aren't really surprised though because just about everything I write is brilliant?

The image in the background is a subway.

[–]JasonCarswellMental Orgy 2 insightful - 2 fun2 insightful - 1 fun3 insightful - 2 fun -  (1 child)

Firstly you should know is Regis.

IFIFY:
Firstly you should know my name is Regis.

Plus there is awkward grammar and/or missing punctuation.

The story is boring. The vocabulary is boring. The character is boring. You even posted it in /s/whatever instead of /s/Writing - boring.

Get a good story. Then we can talk about the illustrations.

[–][deleted] 2 insightful - 2 fun2 insightful - 1 fun3 insightful - 2 fun -  (0 children)

I appreciate the critique.

[–][deleted] 2 insightful - 2 fun2 insightful - 1 fun3 insightful - 2 fun -  (2 children)

a children's book, written by a two year old alcoholic.

[–][deleted] 2 insightful - 1 fun2 insightful - 0 fun3 insightful - 1 fun -  (1 child)

I'll keep you in mind for voice acting when it becomes a major Hollywoo blockbuster.

[–][deleted] 2 insightful - 1 fun2 insightful - 0 fun3 insightful - 1 fun -  (0 children)

i really do wish you well.